Logline Critique Session Two Revisited #6

TITLE: Ghost River
GENRE: Paranormal Mystery

ORIGINAL LOGLINE:

Suddenly unemployed, Veronica jumps at the chance to save money and grab some R & R by house-sitting a home on a peaceful country river, but she soon finds out nature isn't as quiet as it seems when ghosts start to appear in her bedroom, the wrong man sets her hormones on fire, and a body floats in with the tide. Convinced her friend is being framed for the murder, Veronica uses clues from the ghosts and help from the hot guy to search for the real killer, completely unaware he wants to find her first.

REVISED LOGLINE:

When the ghost of a nun tells Veronica she signed an agreement in a former life to help lost souls earn their way to the next spiritual level, Veronica must use clues from the ghosts to prove a friend is innocent of murder and find a missing girl, all while fighting her feelings for an engaged man and running from a possible killer.

Copyright Rachael Harrie 2012